This is my first time posting on the forum... :-) So here are some of my jokes. Itâs not very polished and probably not perfect, but I had a lot of fun. đ
This is all very nice. There are some good changes in composition and viewpoints.
If I had to be picky: youâve only used centered framing (the important element of your image is in the center). In your first image, the path and the forest at the end, in the one on the right, the house, and the same for the third. I donât know if the path was the important element in your first image, but everything draws our attention to it: itâs right in the center, it leads to a clearly visible hill, the perspective of the buildings leads towards the hill, and the mountains bring our gaze back down. All of your characters also seem to be looking in that direction. If you rework this sketch simply by changing the path, your image will change completely ^^
If you feel motivated, Iâd be interested to see what you can do with a non-centered framing, whether by reworking one of the sketches here or by creating a new one :3
Hello Jonatst !
C'est trÚs sympa tout ça. Y a des bons changements de compo et d'angles de vue.
Good evening, here are my âdrawingsâ for this exercise, which made me think hard and for which I admit I got a little help with arranging the objects according to the viewing angle. I look forward to your comments so I can continue to improve and progress. Thank you.
The two at the bottom seem good, except for one small detail.
It looks like thereâs some kind of waterfall on the left, but then, where is the house located?
If there wasnât the waterfall, it would work very well, but there is one, so thereâs a hole/cliff, but I donât see any ledge between the hole and the plane where the house is located.
Whereas you did it well in your third thumbnail (unless itâs the photo thatâs hiding a line from me?).
Otherwise, itâs really cool; there are some nice compositions :3
Hello and thank you. In fact, in the first two images, you can see the house on the left and slightly below, and the waterfall is outside the field of vision. In the image at the top right, you can see the house from the right, as if I had rotated the sphere. This makes it so that you see the waterfall in the âbackgroundâ behind the house, followed by the two fir trees.
Then, in the last two images, you can see the house in front of you, with the figure in front of it, so you can also see the waterfall. Perhaps the fact that you canât see the river behind the house is a mistake on my part; I donât know.
I donât know if this explanation is clearer, but itâs likely that something is missing from the drawing to make it more understandable.
Puis les deux derniĂšres, on voit la maison en face avec le bonhomme devant donc la chute de la cascade aussi. Peut ĂȘtre que le fait de ne pas voir la riviĂšre derriĂšre la maison est une erreur de ma part, je ne sais pas.
Hello, this is my first time posting; usually, I just look at the corrections.
I think what I did is completely awful; itâs bland, nothing happens, and itâs poorly done. Will I ever be able to do it? Haha.
Bonjour, premiĂšre fois que je post, dâhabitude je regarde seulement les corrections.
Jâai lâimpression que câest totalement nul ce que jâai fait, câest plat, il se passe rien et câest mal fait :\ nây arriverais je donc jamais ? Ahaha
Itâs not bad, but the perspective could be improved. You tend to only apply perspective to the house and use a different one for the rest.
The flatness comes from that, but also from the fact that itâs difficult to discern your different planes (a bit of value variation in the lines would fix the problem ;p).
In my opinion, your best thumbnail is the second one, but you tried to put too many things in it. If I were you, I wouldnât have put anything behind the hill with the house; that would have made the image more open and the composition more balanced. The fourth one is also interesting, but the framing is bad, and itâs almost symmetrical, which is a shame, and very central.
The third one is very empty. The interesting elements are placed at the edges of the image, and there is literally nothing in between. Move your character, and youâll rebalance the whole thing ^^
The very first one is simply a perspective problem.
Iâm attaching some possible corrections. Donât hesitate to use boxes to place your different elements at the beginning. That will help you have a good perspective everywhere :)
Hello Astile ^^
Ce n'est pas mauvais, mais ça pĂȘche un peu au niveau de la perspective. Tu as tendance Ă n'appliquer de perspective que sur la maison, et Ă en utiliser une autre pour le reste.
Itâs not bad overall, but you have some very similar thumbnails. Especially the three at the top.
You always have the character in the foreground, the house in the center, and trees to the right or left, right next to the house.
All your compositions are centered (the important elements are in the center of your image).
But they are well-executed and well-composed.
So, Iâm going to challenge you a bit :D
I suggest you create another composition that isnât centered (no important elements in the center of your image), and I suggest you place an element of your choice in the foreground (a tree, a rock, another house, a character). Really, very much in the foreground ^^
Good luck ;p
Hello Regina !
Alors c'est pas mal, mais tu as des vignettes trĂšs similaires entre elles. Les trois du haut en particulier.
Thank you very much for your appreciation. I realized after sending it that everything was going in the same direction, so I will take on the challenge.
There are some very good things, and others that donât make sense and are therefore incomprehensible.
Since youâve done a lot, I canât list them all, so Iâve attached a small image to help you see things more clearly.
For the ones that donât work, itâs a matter of logic â where the house is, why some perspectives seem to be from a certain angle, and then when you look at another element in that perspective, it turns out not to be. These are issues with understanding the overall space, but in your good compositions, you do very well. It might be interesting for you to look for photos with similar views to what you wanted to achieve in your less successful compositions, to perhaps understand what was wrong ^^
Also, be sure to leave some space around the subject of your compositions. You tend to place it too close to the edges. Iâve redone the framing of the ones that could benefit from a little more space to work better :)
But as you can see, the majority of your compositions work very well âïž
This is all looking pretty good. The only thing I notice is that almost all of them have their focal point in the center or on the central axis of the image.
Try creating more compositions where the point of interest isnât right in the middle or on the central line of your image.
Hello Miku !
Ăa fonctionne pas mal tout ça. La seule chose que je vois c'est que ce sont presque toutes des compositions centrales.
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This is my first time posting on the forum... :-) So here are some of my jokes. Itâs not very polished and probably not perfect, but I had a lot of fun. đ
Thanks in advance for your feedback!
PremiĂšre fois que je poste sur le forum... :-) Voici donc mes quelques pochades. Pas trĂšs propre et probablement pas parfait, mais je me suis bien amusĂ©. đ
Merci d'avance pour le retour !
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This is all very nice. There are some good changes in composition and viewpoints.
If I had to be picky: youâve only used centered framing (the important element of your image is in the center). In your first image, the path and the forest at the end, in the one on the right, the house, and the same for the third. I donât know if the path was the important element in your first image, but everything draws our attention to it: itâs right in the center, it leads to a clearly visible hill, the perspective of the buildings leads towards the hill, and the mountains bring our gaze back down. All of your characters also seem to be looking in that direction. If you rework this sketch simply by changing the path, your image will change completely ^^
If you feel motivated, Iâd be interested to see what you can do with a non-centered framing, whether by reworking one of the sketches here or by creating a new one :3
C'est trÚs sympa tout ça. Y a des bons changements de compo et d'angles de vue.
Si je devais pinailler : tu n'as fait que des cadrages centrĂ©s (l'Ă©lĂ©ment important de ton image se trouve au centre). Dans ta premiĂšre image, le chemin et la forĂȘt au bout, dans celle de droite la maison, et pareil pour la troisiĂšme. Je ne sais pas si le chemin Ă©tait l'Ă©lĂ©ment important de ta premiĂšre image, mais tout nous amĂšne Ă y prĂȘter attention : il est en plein centre, il mĂšne Ă une colline bien en Ă©vidence, la perspective des bĂątiments fuit vers la colline et les montagnes nous ramĂšnent vers le bas. Tous tes personnages donnent aussi l'impression de regarder dans cette direction. Si tu reprends cette pochade simplement en modifiant ton chemin, ton image va complĂštement changer ^^
Si tu te sens motivé, ça m'intéresse de voir ce que tu peux faire avec un cadrage non centré, que ce soit en reprenant l'une des pochades ici ou en en créant une nouvelle :3
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Oh, this is all very nice!
I really like the first one â„
The two at the bottom seem good, except for one small detail.
It looks like thereâs some kind of waterfall on the left, but then, where is the house located?
If there wasnât the waterfall, it would work very well, but there is one, so thereâs a hole/cliff, but I donât see any ledge between the hole and the plane where the house is located.
Whereas you did it well in your third thumbnail (unless itâs the photo thatâs hiding a line from me?).
Otherwise, itâs really cool; there are some nice compositions :3
Oh c'est trÚs chouette tout ça !
J'aime beaucoup la premiĂšre â„
les deux du bas me semble bien à un détail prÚs.
J'ai l'impression qu'il y a un genre de cascade sur la gauche, mais du coup, oĂč se trouve la maison ?
S'il n'y avait pas la cascade ça fonctionnerait trĂšs bien, mais lĂ il y en a une, donc un trou / prĂ©cipice, mais je ne vois pas de rebord entre le trou et le plan oĂč se trouve la maison.
Alors que tu l'as bien fait sur ta troisiĂšme vignette (Ă moins que ce soit la photo qui me cache un trait ?)
Autrement c'est vraiment cool, y a de jolies compos :3
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05/01/2020
Then, in the last two images, you can see the house in front of you, with the figure in front of it, so you can also see the waterfall. Perhaps the fact that you canât see the river behind the house is a mistake on my part; I donât know.
I donât know if this explanation is clearer, but itâs likely that something is missing from the drawing to make it more understandable.
Thank you anyway.
Puis les deux derniĂšres, on voit la maison en face avec le bonhomme devant donc la chute de la cascade aussi. Peut ĂȘtre que le fait de ne pas voir la riviĂšre derriĂšre la maison est une erreur de ma part, je ne sais pas.
Je ne sais pas si câest plus clair expliquĂ© comme ça, mais Ă priori Ă travers le dessin il manque certainement quelque chose pour que ce soit plus comprĂ©hensible.
Merci en tout cas
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12/01/2020
As the saying goes, a picture is worth a thousand words, so Iâm going to illustrate what I think is missing from your thumbnails:
Comme le dit si bien l'adage une image vaut mieux que milles mots du coup je t'illustre ce qui me semble manquer sur tes vignettes :
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I think what I did is completely awful; itâs bland, nothing happens, and itâs poorly done. Will I ever be able to do it? Haha.
Jâai lâimpression que câest totalement nul ce que jâai fait, câest plat, il se passe rien et câest mal fait :\ nây arriverais je donc jamais ? Ahaha
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Itâs not bad, but the perspective could be improved. You tend to only apply perspective to the house and use a different one for the rest.
The flatness comes from that, but also from the fact that itâs difficult to discern your different planes (a bit of value variation in the lines would fix the problem ;p).
In my opinion, your best thumbnail is the second one, but you tried to put too many things in it. If I were you, I wouldnât have put anything behind the hill with the house; that would have made the image more open and the composition more balanced. The fourth one is also interesting, but the framing is bad, and itâs almost symmetrical, which is a shame, and very central.
The third one is very empty. The interesting elements are placed at the edges of the image, and there is literally nothing in between. Move your character, and youâll rebalance the whole thing ^^
The very first one is simply a perspective problem.
Iâm attaching some possible corrections. Donât hesitate to use boxes to place your different elements at the beginning. That will help you have a good perspective everywhere :)
Ce n'est pas mauvais, mais ça pĂȘche un peu au niveau de la perspective. Tu as tendance Ă n'appliquer de perspective que sur la maison, et Ă en utiliser une autre pour le reste.
Et le cÎté plat vient de là , mais également du fait qu'on a du mal à lire tes différents plans (un peu coup de valeurs de traits arrangerait le soucis ;p).
Ta meilleure vignette pour moi est la seconde, mais tu as voulu mettre trop de choses, Ă ta place, je n'aurais rien mis derriĂšre le plan de la colline avec la maison, ça aurait aĂ©rĂ© ton image et aurait rendu la composition plus Ă©quilibrĂ©e. La quatriĂšme est intĂ©ressante aussi, mais mal cadrĂ©e, et quasi symĂ©trique en plus d'ĂȘtre trĂšs centrale, c'est dommage.
La troisiÚme est trÚs trÚs vide, les éléments intéressants sont plaqués aux bords de l'image et il n'y a littéralement rien entre les deux. Déplace ton personnage et tu rééquilibreras le tout ^^
La toute premiĂšre c'est un pur problĂšme de perspective.
Je te joins des corrections possibles. N'hĂ©site pas Ă construire avec des boites pour placer tes diffĂ©rents Ă©lĂ©ments au dĂ©but. Ăa t'aidera Ă avoir une bonne perspective partout :)
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Your latest thumbnail is really cool ^^
The first line is more of a test of the arrangement of elements; you havenât really changed the viewing angle or added a foreground or background.
But your latest thumbnail is quite balanced and tells a story, which is exactly what we like đ
Ta derniĂšre vignette est trĂšs cool ^^
La premiÚre ligne c'est plutÎt un test de disposition des éléments, en soi tu n'as pas changé l'angle de vue ni ajouté de premier ou arriÚre-plan.
Ta derniĂšre vignette en tout cas est plutĂŽt Ă©quilibrĂ©e et raconte une histoire, tout ce qu'on aime đ
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I am sending you the storyboard for the drawings; I hope I understood the concept correctly.
Thank you.
je vous envoie la mise en scĂšne des dessins, j'espĂšre avoir compris le concept
merci
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Itâs not bad overall, but you have some very similar thumbnails. Especially the three at the top.
You always have the character in the foreground, the house in the center, and trees to the right or left, right next to the house.
All your compositions are centered (the important elements are in the center of your image).
But they are well-executed and well-composed.
So, Iâm going to challenge you a bit :D
I suggest you create another composition that isnât centered (no important elements in the center of your image), and I suggest you place an element of your choice in the foreground (a tree, a rock, another house, a character). Really, very much in the foreground ^^
Good luck ;p
Alors c'est pas mal, mais tu as des vignettes trĂšs similaires entre elles. Les trois du haut en particulier.
On a toujours le personnage en premier plan, toujours la maison au centre, toujours des arbres à droite ou à gauche juste à cÎté de la maison.
Toutes tes compositions sont centrales (les éléments importants sont au centre de ton image).
Mais elles sont justes et bien composées.
Du coup, je vais te challenger un peu :D
Je te propose de faire une autre compo non centrée (aucun élément important au centre de ton image), et je te propose de mettre un élément de ton choix au premier plan (un arbre, un rocher, une autre maison, un personnage). Vraiment trÚs trÚs devant ^^
Bon courage ;p
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10/02/2020
Thank you very much for your appreciation. I realized after sending it that everything was going in the same direction, so I will take on the challenge.
Iâm sending the rabbit and the (young man).
Best regards,
Regina
merci beaucoup pour l'apprĂ©ciation, car je me suis apercue aprĂšs l'avoir envoyĂ© que tout Ă©tait dans le mĂȘme sens, donc je vais relever le challenge.
j'envoie le lapin et le (jeune homme)
salutations
regina
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There are some very good things, and others that donât make sense and are therefore incomprehensible.
Since youâve done a lot, I canât list them all, so Iâve attached a small image to help you see things more clearly.
For the ones that donât work, itâs a matter of logic â where the house is, why some perspectives seem to be from a certain angle, and then when you look at another element in that perspective, it turns out not to be. These are issues with understanding the overall space, but in your good compositions, you do very well. It might be interesting for you to look for photos with similar views to what you wanted to achieve in your less successful compositions, to perhaps understand what was wrong ^^
Also, be sure to leave some space around the subject of your compositions. You tend to place it too close to the edges. Iâve redone the framing of the ones that could benefit from a little more space to work better :)
But as you can see, the majority of your compositions work very well âïž
Il y a de trÚs bonnes choses et d'autres qui ne sont pas logiques et donc incompréhensibles.
Comme tu en as fait beaucoup je ne peux pas les lister, donc je t'ai joint une petite image pour que tu puisses y voir plus clair.
Pour celles qui ne fonctionnent pas, ce sont des soucis de logique, oĂč se trouve la maison, pourquoi certains plans semblent ĂȘtre d'un certain angle puis lorsqu'on regarde un autre Ă©lĂ©ment dans ce plan, en fait non. Ce sont des soucis de comprĂ©hension de l'espace globalement, mais dans tes bons cadrages tu te dĂ©brouilles trĂšs bien. Ăa peut ĂȘtre intĂ©ressant que tu cherches des photos avec des vues similaires Ă ce que tu souhaitais faire sur tes compos moins abouties pour peut-ĂȘtre comprendre ce qui clochait ^^
Attention aussi à laisser de l'espace au sujet de tes compositions. Tu as tendance à le coller aux bords. J'ai refait le cadre de ceux qui aurait mérité un peu d'espace pour mieux fonctionner :)
Mais comme tu peux le voir, la majeure partie de tes compos fonctionne trĂšs bien âïž
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here are my drafts of the thumbnails :)
Feel free to share your thoughts or let me know if there are any points that need to be revised or improved ^^
Thank you!
voici mes essais sur les vignettes :)
Hésitez pas à dire que ce vous en pensez ou si il y a des points à revoir ou améliorer ^^
Merci !
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This is all looking pretty good. The only thing I notice is that almost all of them have their focal point in the center or on the central axis of the image.
Try creating more compositions where the point of interest isnât right in the middle or on the central line of your image.
Ăa fonctionne pas mal tout ça. La seule chose que je vois c'est que ce sont presque toutes des compositions centrales.
Essaye d'en faire davantage qui n'ait pas leur point d'intĂ©rĂȘt en plein milieu ou sur la ligne centrale de ton image ^^