The composition is great, your elements are well-constructed, and it tells a little story too. Youâve even placed your elements according to different vanishing points, and it works really well.
The one area where you could improve is with the grayscale values.
If you look at your image from a distance, everything is a bit uniform. You donât really have any planes that stand out. If I were you, I would try darkening the building in the background and the top of the tanks on the right.
Hi! đ
Here is my little illustration.
I like my composition, even though I think itâs full of mistakes! đ
Iâm open to any criticism because I really want to improve!
Thank you very much for these well-structured lessons; they have helped me to think more carefully when I draw.
I think Iâve learned more in just a few weeks than I did in all those years of drawing!
Hi!
Thank you for the positive feedback! I canât wait to see the character design lessons so I can better incorporate them into my work.
Youâre right, I didnât think enough about the clouds. I just focused on the guidelines and their placement in the image.
But being able to successfully use the concepts learned in the lessons allows me to appreciate my illustration, even if itâs still far from the result I really want.
Here is my illustration, and I tried to follow the advice given in the lessons so far.
I feel like I still have a lot of progress to make, but I already feel like my drawings have improved a lot since I started taking your courses.
I would really appreciate your critical feedback, as it would be very helpful to me đ
There are some good things, and others that could be improved.
You went with a sci-fi theme, and you tell us a little story, which is cool.
I understood that a shuttle was crashing, even if I don't understand what it's crashing into. It looks like some kind of circular structure, and we can see another one in the background. And I can clearly see the shuttle first; I think that's where you wanted me to look. You managed the shades of gray and line values well.
Here are some things that could be improved:
> The famous circular structure: I don't understand what it is, and compared to the other one we see very far away on the horizon, it seems thinner. It's not the same object. And I'm having trouble understanding its volume.
> The foreground: I have the impression that it's the top of a store? I'm not sure. In any case, it takes up as much space in the image as your crashing spaceship. It's a shame because it doesn't add anything to your illustration. If it were more offset to one side, it would be more impactful, and your image would breathe more.
> You have a visual conflict in your image, which tends to attract attention and disrupt the viewing experience: the top edge of the building in the foreground is confused with the horizon line. You should avoid doing this; either the horizon line is clearly above it, or the building clearly cuts across the horizon line. But these overlaps disrupt the viewing experience a lot: 3
> I think you've placed your main subject, the shuttle, too far off-center. Bringing it a little closer to the center (without centering it, just moving it less to the side) would be more effective in my opinion.
Otherwise, there are quite a few things that are well done: you've added depth, there are two planes (I think you wanted to create three with the building in the foreground, but it's too close in size to your shuttle for me to consider it really in front of it). You tell us a story, and we understand what's happening; you managed the shades of gray and line values well, and we mainly look at your main subject: the shuttle.
I'm attaching an example of a possible correction. I think another angle of view could have been more impactful as well, but I stuck with yours; I just zoomed out a little so that the image breathes more. And the perspective of the building in the foreground is completely messed up now, so be kind ^^' Also, I noticed that the sky was starry; did you choose to leave it light on purpose?
> la fameuse structure circulaire : je ne comprends pas de quoi il s'agit et par rapport Ă l'autre qu'on voit trÚÚÚÚÚs loin Ă l'horizon, elle semble plus fine. Ce n'est pas le mĂȘme objet. Et j'ai du mal Ă comprendre son volume.
Thank you for your feedback, which has made me realize some issues with this drawing that I hadnât anticipated!
First, regarding the points you raised:
> The circular structures: I tried to depict a kind of futuristic spaceship race, and the rings are meant to resemble retro video games, where they are the âcheckpointsâ that the spaceship has to pass through to follow the course. Itâs not necessarily easy to make that clear :/
> The structure of the foreground: I had in mind to represent a kind of empty grandstand, with a sort of advertising banner hanging between two tiers of seats. Is it a problem with the grayscale levels, making it difficult to distinguish the different âbenchesâ? Or is it a lack of detail?
> Noted about the visual issue with the horizon line; thatâs a tip Iâll keep in mind! :3
> The sky is clear because I thought that darkening it might dilute the grayscale levels on the other elements of the drawing, and they would stand out better against a light background.
Also, to be honest, the spaceship wasnât supposed to crash, but rather to make a turn in the circuit. Thatâs what I hadnât anticipated: because the rings werenât very clear (and probably the spaceship should have been a little higher in the drawing), it changed the interpretation :s
Your zoomed-out view looks great, in any case; itâs definitely more pleasant to view that way!
You designed something by moving away from reality, but you applied the principles we learned in class very well. Your composition is great; it tells a story, itâs beautifully done, and the values are well defined.
Honestly, well done, itâs very good work âïž
The only thing I would change is the clouds. In my opinion, theyâre not necessary at all.
Iâm happy with this drawing; I took my time, and for once, I didnât rush.
All these lessons have boosted my morale because I was finally learning and understanding.
But recently, I started the anatomy lessons, and thatâs when⊠I was completely overwhelmed. I donât know how to work with the human body, and I donât understand it. I realize that when I draw a human being, I only rely on what I see.
Mais derniĂšrement j'ai commencer les cours sur l'anatomie et alors lĂ âŠ.grosse claque, je ne sais pas comment travailler le corps humain, et je ne le comprends pas. Je me rends bien compte que lorsque je dessine un ĂȘtre humain, je ne fait confiance qu'Ă ce que je vois.
Yes, the human body is quite complex. And the same goes for living beings in general.
Itâs good to understand how things work beneath the skin and the overall structure, and therefore to study anatomy. I have no doubt that you can do it, but I think some training might be helpful :)
Itâs very beautiful and poetic. It has a nice depth, it tells a beautiful story, and itâs truly touching.
However, I have a few suggestions to improve your drawing, particularly in terms of composition.
> The tree branch is nice and adds a poetic touch; itâs important, but itâs poorly placed in the sense that it encroaches on your subject: the stork watching its mate leave. I would move it to the left and raise it slightly to create a little more space around the stork.
> The stork in the distance, I would have positioned its wings differently. Here, they form a T, which makes its pose very rigid, which is a shame.
> I would have shifted the sun slightly to the left so that itâs not directly above the second stork, and to rebalance the image a bit.
Iâve created a quick preview below. Otherwise, itâs really great, well done, and itâs a nice conclusion to the training.
After three weeks of work, I have completed the drawing for this course, but unfortunately, I havenât had the inspiration for a personal creation.
Perhaps itâs also due to the fear of getting stuck on a particular element while working on perspective, having chosen a subject that is too complex or one that I havenât tackled before.
However, I wonder if itâs possible to use the hatching technique along with other shading effects in the same drawing (Iâm thinking specifically of clouds).
Again, I apologize for the lack of originality in the subject presented here.
Par contre je me demande si on peut se permettre sur le mĂȘme dessin dâutiliser la technique des hachures avec dâautre effet de remplissage ( je pense notamment aux nuages) .
And what can I say: Wow! Oh my gosh, the composition, the atmosphere, the grayscale values, itâs all impeccable >///<
The result is fantastic; you can tell just from the thumbnail, it works REALLY WELL. Special mention for the grayscale values, which are managed superbly. Thereâs such a great atmosphere in your drawing; itâs amazing. I love it â„
Well done! I canât wait to see what you can do with a subject you choose yourself :D
Thank you for the encouragement; itâs comforting and helps restore my confidence. I wonât jump into a new topic right away, but I will continue with the next steps of the course. Iâll come back to this topic later to try my hand at a personal illustration.
When it comes to personal creative projects, a little time alone comes first... but that's precisely what makes it so interesting... đđ
I'm going to post 4 A4 sheets (this is the format I use, as I don't know how to scan anything else), I won't post everything because YES, I used a lot of paper...
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13/10/2019
Hereâs my first drawing! đ
I would really appreciate some feedback.
RĂ©mi
Voici mon premier dessin! đ
Une critique m'aiderait beaucoup.
RĂ©mi
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13/10/2019
Well, Iâm very pleasantly surprised :D
The composition is great, your elements are well-constructed, and it tells a little story too. Youâve even placed your elements according to different vanishing points, and it works really well.
The one area where you could improve is with the grayscale values.
If you look at your image from a distance, everything is a bit uniform. You donât really have any planes that stand out. If I were you, I would try darkening the building in the background and the top of the tanks on the right.
Iâve attached a little preview below ^^
Otherwise, itâs really great, well done! :D
Eh bien je suis trÚs agréablement surpris :D
La compo est cool, tes Ă©lĂ©ments sont bien construits, ça raconte une petite histoire en plus. Tu as mĂȘme placĂ© tes Ă©lĂ©ments selon des points de fuite diffĂ©rents et ça fonctionne trĂšs bien.
LĂ oĂč tu pourrais amĂ©liorer les choses, c'est au niveau des valeurs de gris.
Si on regarde ton image de loin, tout est un peu uniforme. Tu n'as pas réellement de plans qui se détachent. Si j'étais toi, je testerais en assombrissant le bùtiment du fond et un peu le haut des citernes à droite.
Je te joins un petit aperçu en-dessous ^^
Autrement, c'est trĂšs chouette, bravo ! :D
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14/10/2019
I had created a scale of values for myself, but itâs hard to stick to it. Iâll do better next time!
Je m'Ă©tait fait une echelle de valeur, mais c'est dur de s'y tenir.
Je ferai mieux pour les prochains!
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19/10/2019
Here is my little illustration.
I like my composition, even though I think itâs full of mistakes! đ
Iâm open to any criticism because I really want to improve!
Thank you very much for these well-structured lessons; they have helped me to think more carefully when I draw.
I think Iâve learned more in just a few weeks than I did in all those years of drawing!
Voici ma petite illustration.
J'aime bien ma composition mĂȘme si je pense que c'est bourrĂ© d'erreur ! đ
Je suis ouvert à toute critique car je compte bien m'améliorer !
Un grand merci pour ces cours bien structuré, ça m'a permis de mieux réfléchir lorsque je dessine.
Je pense avoir plus appris en quelque semaine que de toute ces années de dessins !
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20/10/2019
Honestly, it works well: D Youâve put the different concepts we covered in class to good use.
My only criticism would be about the clouds, which are all of a similar size and very close to the horizon. It makes the composition a bit cramped. :)
Your characters might be a little too big, but itâs not too noticeable. ^^
Itâs good work, well done! :D
HonnĂȘtement ça fonctionne bien :D Tu as bien utilisĂ© les diffĂ©rentes notions vues en cours.
Mon seul bémol serait concernant les nuages qui sont tous de taille similaire et trÚs proche de l'horizon. Ca étouffe un peu ta compo :)
Tes personnages sont peut-ĂȘtre un poil grands, mais ce n'est pas choquant ^^
C'est du bon boulot, bravo ! :D
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20/10/2019
Thank you for the positive feedback! I canât wait to see the character design lessons so I can better incorporate them into my work.
Youâre right, I didnât think enough about the clouds. I just focused on the guidelines and their placement in the image.
But being able to successfully use the concepts learned in the lessons allows me to appreciate my illustration, even if itâs still far from the result I really want.
Merci pour la réponse positive ! J'ai hùte de voir les cours de personnage pour mieux les mettre en scÚne.
C'est vrais que pour les nuages je ne me suis posé assez de questions. J'ai juste pensé aux lignes directrices qu'à leur place sur l'image.
Mais d'avoir rĂ©ussis Ă utiliser les notions vu en cours me permet d'apprĂ©cier mon illustration mĂȘme si c'est encore loin du rĂ©sultat que je souhaite vraiment.
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03/11/2019
Here is my illustration, and I tried to follow the advice given in the lessons so far.
I feel like I still have a lot of progress to make, but I already feel like my drawings have improved a lot since I started taking your courses.
I would really appreciate your critical feedback, as it would be very helpful to me đ
Voilà mon illustration, en essayant de suivre les conseils prodigué dans les cours jusque-là .
Je sens que j'ai encore beaucoup de progrÚs à faire, mais j'ai déjà l'impression que mes dessins se sont bien amélioré depuis que je suis vos cours.
J'aimerai beaucoup avoir votre retour critique, cela m'aiderait beaucoup đ
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05/11/2019
So, I have a lot to say: D
There are some good things, and others that could be improved.
You went with a sci-fi theme, and you tell us a little story, which is cool.
I understood that a shuttle was crashing, even if I don't understand what it's crashing into. It looks like some kind of circular structure, and we can see another one in the background. And I can clearly see the shuttle first; I think that's where you wanted me to look. You managed the shades of gray and line values well.
Here are some things that could be improved:
> The famous circular structure: I don't understand what it is, and compared to the other one we see very far away on the horizon, it seems thinner. It's not the same object. And I'm having trouble understanding its volume.
> The foreground: I have the impression that it's the top of a store? I'm not sure. In any case, it takes up as much space in the image as your crashing spaceship. It's a shame because it doesn't add anything to your illustration. If it were more offset to one side, it would be more impactful, and your image would breathe more.
> You have a visual conflict in your image, which tends to attract attention and disrupt the viewing experience: the top edge of the building in the foreground is confused with the horizon line. You should avoid doing this; either the horizon line is clearly above it, or the building clearly cuts across the horizon line. But these overlaps disrupt the viewing experience a lot: 3
> I think you've placed your main subject, the shuttle, too far off-center. Bringing it a little closer to the center (without centering it, just moving it less to the side) would be more effective in my opinion.
Otherwise, there are quite a few things that are well done: you've added depth, there are two planes (I think you wanted to create three with the building in the foreground, but it's too close in size to your shuttle for me to consider it really in front of it). You tell us a story, and we understand what's happening; you managed the shades of gray and line values well, and we mainly look at your main subject: the shuttle.
I'm attaching an example of a possible correction. I think another angle of view could have been more impactful as well, but I stuck with yours; I just zoomed out a little so that the image breathes more. And the perspective of the building in the foreground is completely messed up now, so be kind ^^' Also, I noticed that the sky was starry; did you choose to leave it light on purpose?
Alors j'ai pleins de choses Ă dire :D
Il y a de bonnes choses, et d'autres qu'on pourrait améliorer.
Tu es parti sur un thĂšme SF, et tu nous racontes une petite histoire, c'est cool.
J'ai bien compris qu'une navette s'Ă©crasait, mĂȘme si je ne comprends pas sur quoi. Un genre de structure circulaire, on en voit une autre au fond. Et je vois bien la navette en premier, je pense que c'est lĂ que tu voulais diriger mon regard. Tu as bien gĂ©rĂ© les niveaux de gris et les valeurs de traits.
Dans les choses qu'on peut améliorer :
> la fameuse structure circulaire : je ne comprends pas de quoi il s'agit et par rapport Ă l'autre qu'on voit trÚÚÚÚÚs loin Ă l'horizon, elle semble plus fine. Ce n'est pas le mĂȘme objet. Et j'ai du mal Ă comprendre son volume.
> Le premier plan : j'ai l'impression que c'est le dessus d'un magasin ? Je ne suis pas sûr. En tout cas, il prend autant de place sur son image que ton vaisseau qui s'écrase. C'est dommage parce qu'il n'apporte rien à ton illustration. S'il était davantage décalé sur un bord, ce serait plus percutant et ton image respirerait davantage.
> Tu as un noeud graphique dans ton image, ce qui a tendance à attirer l'attention et perturber la lecture : le bord supérieur du bùtiment au premier plan est confondu avec la ligne d'horizon. Il faut éviter de faire ce genre de choses, soit on voit la ligne d'horizon franchement au-dessus, soit le bùtiment coupe franchement la ligne d'horizon. Mais les superpositions comme ça perturbent beaucoup la lecture :3
> Je pense que tu as trop excentré ton sujet principal : la navette. La ramener un petit plus vers le centre (sans la centrer, juste la mettre moins sur le cÎté), serait plus judicieux à mon sens.
Autrement il y a pas mal de choses qui sont bien gérées : tu as mis de la profondeur, on a deux plans (je pense que tu voulais en faire 3 avec le bùtiment au premier plan mais il est trop proche de la taille de ta navette pour que je le considÚre comme réellement en avant par rapport à elle. Tu nous racontes une histoire et on comprend ce qui se passe, tu as bien géré les niveaux de gris et les valeurs de traits et on regarde bien principalement ton sujet : la navette.
Je te joins un exemple de correction possible. Je pense qu'un autre angle de vue aurait pu ĂȘtre plus percutant aussi, mais je suis restĂ© sur le tien, j'ai juste un peu dĂ©zoomĂ© pour que l'image respire davantage. Et la perspective du bĂątiment au premier plan est toute cassĂ©e du coup, sois indulgent ^^' D'ailleurs, j'ai notĂ© que le ciel Ă©tait Ă©toilĂ©, tu as choisi volontairement de le laisser clair du coup ?
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07/11/2019
Thank you for your feedback, which has made me realize some issues with this drawing that I hadnât anticipated!
First, regarding the points you raised:
> The circular structures: I tried to depict a kind of futuristic spaceship race, and the rings are meant to resemble retro video games, where they are the âcheckpointsâ that the spaceship has to pass through to follow the course. Itâs not necessarily easy to make that clear :/
> The structure of the foreground: I had in mind to represent a kind of empty grandstand, with a sort of advertising banner hanging between two tiers of seats. Is it a problem with the grayscale levels, making it difficult to distinguish the different âbenchesâ? Or is it a lack of detail?
> Noted about the visual issue with the horizon line; thatâs a tip Iâll keep in mind! :3
> The sky is clear because I thought that darkening it might dilute the grayscale levels on the other elements of the drawing, and they would stand out better against a light background.
Also, to be honest, the spaceship wasnât supposed to crash, but rather to make a turn in the circuit. Thatâs what I hadnât anticipated: because the rings werenât very clear (and probably the spaceship should have been a little higher in the drawing), it changed the interpretation :s
Your zoomed-out view looks great, in any case; itâs definitely more pleasant to view that way!
Thanks again for the constructive feedback ;)
Merci pour ton retour, qui me fait prendre conscience de quelques soucis sur ce dessin que je n'avais pas anticipés!
Déjà , pour les points que tu as relevés :
> Les structures circulaires : J'ai essayé de représenter une sorte de course de vaisseau futuriste, et les anneaux sont à l'image des jeux vidéos un peu rétro, ce sont les "points" dans lequel le vaisseau doit passer pour suivre le chemin de la course. Pas forcément facile à faire deviner :/
> La structure du premier plan : J'avais en tĂȘte de reprĂ©senter un gradin, certes vide, avec une sorte de bandeau publicitaire accrochĂ© entre deux gradins. Un problĂšme de niveaux de gris pour faire ressortir les diffĂ©rents "bancs"? Ou un manque de dĂ©tails?
> Gotcha pour le noeud graphique avec la ligne d'horizon, c'est un conseil que je vais garder en tĂȘte! :3
> Le ciel est clair, parce que je me suis dit que le noircir risquait de diluer mes niveaux de gris sur les autres éléments du dessin, et qu'ils ressortiraient mieux sur un fond clair.
AprĂšs, pour ne rien te cacher, le vaisseau n'Ă©tait pas sensĂ© s'Ă©craser, mais engager un virage dans le circuit. C'est ça que je n'avais pas anticipĂ© : parce que les anneaux n'Ă©taient pas trĂšs clair ( et probablement que le vaisseau aurait gagnĂ© Ă ĂȘtre un peu plus haut dans le dessin), ça a changĂ© l'interprĂ©tation :s
Ton dézoom a bien belle allure en tout cas, c'est effectivement plus agréable à survoler!
Encore merci pour le retour constructif ;)
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14/11/2019
Here is my illustration. I tried to put the advice given in the lessons into practice.
To be honest, I am quite happy with the result, especially with the perspective (even though there are certainly some mistakes).
I would really appreciate some feedback, including areas where I could improve, or any other constructive criticism. All feedback is welcome.
Have a good day, everyone.
Voilà mon illustration, j'ai essayé de mettre en pratique les conseils donnés dans les cours.
HonnĂȘtement je suis assez contente du rendu, notamment en perspective (mĂȘme s'il y certainement des erreurs).
J'aimerais beaucoup avoir un retour, les points oĂč que je devrais amĂ©liorer, enfin toute critique constructive et la bien venue.
Bonne journée à tous.
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I really like what youâve done â„
You designed something by moving away from reality, but you applied the principles we learned in class very well. Your composition is great; it tells a story, itâs beautifully done, and the values are well defined.
Honestly, well done, itâs very good work âïž
The only thing I would change is the clouds. In my opinion, theyâre not necessary at all.
Other than that, great job! \o/
J'aime Ă©normĂ©ment ce que tu as fait â„
Tu as designé en t'éloignant du réel, mais en appliquant bien les principes vus en cours. Ta compo est chouette, ça nous raconte une histoire, c'est joliment fait, les valeurs sont bien posées.
Nan franchement chapeau, c'est du trĂšs bon travail âïž
La seule chose que je modifierai, ce sont les nuages. Pour moi ils ne sont pas nécessaires du tout.
A part ça gros bravo ! \o/
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21/11/2019
Iâm happy with this drawing; I took my time, and for once, I didnât rush.
All these lessons have boosted my morale because I was finally learning and understanding.
But recently, I started the anatomy lessons, and thatâs when⊠I was completely overwhelmed. I donât know how to work with the human body, and I donât understand it. I realize that when I draw a human being, I only rely on what I see.
Je suis contente de ce dessin, j'ai pris mon temps et pour une fois je ne me suis pas précipitée.
Tous ces cours m'ont remontée de le morale car j'apprenais et comprenais enfin.
Mais derniĂšrement j'ai commencer les cours sur l'anatomie et alors lĂ âŠ.grosse claque, je ne sais pas comment travailler le corps humain, et je ne le comprends pas. Je me rends bien compte que lorsque je dessine un ĂȘtre humain, je ne fait confiance qu'Ă ce que je vois.
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01/12/2019
Yes, the human body is quite complex. And the same goes for living beings in general.
Itâs good to understand how things work beneath the skin and the overall structure, and therefore to study anatomy. I have no doubt that you can do it, but I think some training might be helpful :)
Oui le corps humain c'est un gros morceau. Les ĂȘtres vivants en gĂ©nĂ©ral d'ailleurs.
C'est bien de comprendre comment ça se passe sous la peau et la structure gĂ©nĂ©rale pour ça, et donc de se pencher sur l'anatomie. Je ne doute pas que tu puisses y arriver, mais une formation pourrait ĂȘtre la bienvenue je pense :)
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17/11/2019
Iâm sending you my first drawing.
Thank you for your feedback.
Je t'envoie mon 1er dessin.
Merci pour ton retour
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20/11/2019
Itâs very beautiful and poetic. It has a nice depth, it tells a beautiful story, and itâs truly touching.
However, I have a few suggestions to improve your drawing, particularly in terms of composition.
> The tree branch is nice and adds a poetic touch; itâs important, but itâs poorly placed in the sense that it encroaches on your subject: the stork watching its mate leave. I would move it to the left and raise it slightly to create a little more space around the stork.
> The stork in the distance, I would have positioned its wings differently. Here, they form a T, which makes its pose very rigid, which is a shame.
> I would have shifted the sun slightly to the left so that itâs not directly above the second stork, and to rebalance the image a bit.
Iâve created a quick preview below. Otherwise, itâs really great, well done, and itâs a nice conclusion to the training.
C'est trÚs joli et poétique. On a une jolie profondeur, ça nous raconte une belle histoire, c'est vraiment touchant.
J'aurais néanmoins quelque suggestions pour améliorer ton dessin en terme de composition notamment.
> La branche d'arbre est jolie et apporte une note poĂ©tique, elle est importe, mais mal placĂ©e dans le sens oĂč elle empiĂšte sur ton sujet : la cigogne qui regarde partir sa moitiĂ©. Je la dĂ©placerais sur la gauche et je ma remonterai pour dĂ©gager un peu d'espace autour de la cigogne.
> La cigogne dans le lointain je l'aurais fait avec les ailes dans une autre position. Ici elle forme un T, ça fige beaucoup sa pose, c'est dommage.
> J'aurais décalé un peu le soleil vers la gauche pour ne pas l'avoir bien à l'aplomb de la seconde cigogne et rééquilibrer un peu l'image.
Je t'ai fait un aperçu rapide ci-dessous. Autrement c'est vraiment chouette, bravo à toi, c'est une jolie conclusion à la formation ^^
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I checked out your gallery; your drawings are really great.
J'ai vu ta galerie; c'est super chouette tes dessins.
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After three weeks of work, I have completed the drawing for this course, but unfortunately, I havenât had the inspiration for a personal creation.
Perhaps itâs also due to the fear of getting stuck on a particular element while working on perspective, having chosen a subject that is too complex or one that I havenât tackled before.
Also, when I see how easily GrĂ©goire sketches his quick drawings, I donât think Iâm capable of reproducing subjects in perspective from memory without using vanishing points.
Thereâs also GrĂ©goireâs technique for finding the midpoint of the roofâs ridge, and I think that this type of situation would probably have hindered my progress.
So, with a bit of hesitation, I decided to work on the subject presented by Grégoire to see if I could complete a drawing with his final rendering, using contrasts and variations in line weight.
However, I wonder if itâs possible to use the hatching technique along with other shading effects in the same drawing (Iâm thinking specifically of clouds).
Again, I apologize for the lack of originality in the subject presented here.
AprĂšs 3 semaines de travail jâai finalisĂ© le dessin pour ce cours, mais malheureusement je nâai pas eu lâinspiration pour une crĂ©ation personnelle.
La peur sans doute aussi de rester bloqué sur un élément dans le travail sur la perspective en ayant choisit un sujet trop complexe ou par encore abordé.
Ensuite lorsque je vois avec quelle facilitĂ© GrĂ©goire esquisse ses pochades , je pense pas encore ĂȘtre capable de reproduire Ă main levĂ© des sujets en perspective sans utiliser les points de fuites.
Il y a aussi la technique de Grégoire pour trouver le point médian de la flÚche de la toiture, je pense que ce type de situation aurait sans doute bloquer ma réalisation.
Donc avec un peu de gĂšne je me suis lancĂ© dans la rĂ©alisation du sujet prĂ©sentĂ© par GrĂ©goire afin de voir si jâarriverais Ă complĂ©ter un dessin avec sa mise au propre en utilisant les contrastes et les valeurs de trait.
Par contre je me demande si on peut se permettre sur le mĂȘme dessin dâutiliser la technique des hachures avec dâautre effet de remplissage ( je pense notamment aux nuages) .
Encore dĂ©solĂ© pour le manque dâoriginalitĂ© du sujet prĂ©sentĂ© ici
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20/11/2019
Itâs not a problem that you stuck with GrĂ©goireâs example :) Originality will come later; itâs good to establish a solid foundation to start with :D
And what can I say: Wow! Oh my gosh, the composition, the atmosphere, the grayscale values, itâs all impeccable >///<
The result is fantastic; you can tell just from the thumbnail, it works REALLY WELL. Special mention for the grayscale values, which are managed superbly. Thereâs such a great atmosphere in your drawing; itâs amazing. I love it â„
Well done! I canât wait to see what you can do with a subject you choose yourself :D
C'est pas un problĂšme d'ĂȘtre restĂ© sur l'exemple de GrĂ©goire :) L'originalitĂ© viendra aprĂšs, c'est bien d'assurer ses bases pour commencer :D
Et que dire : Whaouh ! Rholalala, la compo, l'ambiance, les valeurs de gris c'est impeccable >///<
Le rendu est top, ça se voit avec la miniature, ça fonctionne HYPER BIEN. Mention spĂ©ciale pour les valeurs de gris qui sont super bien gĂ©rĂ©es. Y a une de ces ambiances dans ton dessin, c'est dingue. J'adore â„
Bravo ! J'ai hĂąte de voir ce que tu es capable de faire avec un sujet que tu auras choisi par toi-mĂȘme :D
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je vais pas me lancer de suite dans un nouveau sujet mais continuer les Ă©tapes suivantes du cours .
Je reviendra sur ce sujet plus tard pour m'essayer sur une illustration personnelle.
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When it comes to personal creative projects, a little time alone comes first... but that's precisely what makes it so interesting... đđ
I'm going to post 4 A4 sheets (this is the format I use, as I don't know how to scan anything else), I won't post everything because YES, I used a lot of paper...
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Pour la crĂ©ation personnelle, et bien un petit moment de solitude prĂ©cĂšde...mais c'est justement ce qui est passionnant...đđ
Je vais poster 4 A4 (mon format, car je ne sais rien scanner d'autre), je ne mets pas tout car OUI, j'ai usé du papier...
Merci de vos retour
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