Itâs really interesting to see how your work has evolved, and youâve created a boat! And a city!
Your illustration is really cool; youâve handled the perspective well. Itâs clear, and we have a nice setting around it, a holiday atmosphere. I really like how youâve treated the water, it works very well, and the boat looks great.
Honestly, itâs awesome!
The only thing that makes me wonder is the composition of your image. Your illustration looks very much like a postcard, with the setting and the sea as the main subject. Whereas in your earlier sketches, I had the impression that you wanted to draw attention to the boat. But I could be wrong. Did you want to create an illustration in the style of a postcard, or were you aiming for something different?
Good, Iâm glad you found it interesting. The postcard effect is more of a side effect.
I was in Brittany, so there was the sea, boats, a harbor, and a crĂȘperie⊠I sent a limited number of postcards (I actually sent twice as many), so the ones that accompany the drawing arenât the most relevant, because at one point I went âfishing.â
Regarding the perspective in retrospect, I think I misrepresented the chimneys (in my opinion, we shouldnât see them from above).
Here is my drawing! I didnât include the sketches in the previous lesson because I had a little trouble finding inspiration, so it took me a lot of attempts.
Here is my drawing, thank you in advance for your feedback :)
So, Iâm a bit torn because on the one hand, the composition is good, itâs clean, clear, and well-executed.
But on the other hand, thereâs a huge perspective problem. That said, it could be a stylistic choice; you see this kind of perspective on board game layouts, for example.
But I donât think that was the intended effect.
Iâve attached a correction to show you the core of the problem.
Overall, you have two different perspectives in your drawing. On one hand, your ground, the small river, the bridge, the streetlights, and the benches are on a plane that weâre looking down on.
On the other hand, we have the hotel, which weâre looking at head-on, with the horizon line in front of us.
Conclusion: itâs physically impossible.
So, Iâve made a correction to unify it by choosing one perspective or the other.
Hereâs my unfinished drawing, because I plan to color it in with felt-tip pens, which basically means Iâm going to completely ruin it without mercy. See you soon!
It looks really good, and even with the color, the image is easy to read â itâs really cool (and +1 for the dragon ;p).
If I had to nitpick, I think the foreground is in a strange perspective, and the rocks look too soft (more like melted chocolate than sharp stones).
Otherwise, itâs really cool ^^.
Tu t'en sors bien avec les feutres Jojo !
Ăa rend super bien, mĂȘme Ă la couleur ton image se lit bien c'est vraiment chouette (et +1 pour le dragon ;p).
Si je devais pinailler, je trouve que le premier plan est dans une perspective bizarre et que les rochers on l'air tout mou (plus comme du chocolat fondu que comme des cailloux tranchants).
Hi! I need some help; Iâm working on the sketches, and I have a feeling Iâm going to struggle with the city scene in the foreground. If you have any advice on how to orient the buildings so they arenât all facing the same vanishing points, etc., that would be great⊠^^â I know itâs probably a complicated drawing for a beginner, but I really like the idea! xD P.S.: The horizon line is at the level of the large wall in the background, in front of the castle.
I started cleaning it up, trying to follow all the rules⊠Iâm going to finish it, but for this lesson, Iâm going to do something else thatâs less complicated for me (plus, I wanted the light to come from behind, so⊠xD xD). Anyway, Iâm going to continue with the warmer colors, I think, starting with the city in the foreground.
Too bad I couldnât have replied sooner, I could have given you some feedback on the composition (the huge gap between the castle and the village, and the castle being cut off at the top).
To answer your question about the village, as you might guess, if you want to orient the houses differently from each other, youâll need to give them different vanishing points.
You still place them on the horizon line (that doesnât change), and you apply the new vanishing points you created to some of your houses.
Thank you so much for the compliment! I was actually planning to fill in the empty space with lots of buildings to show that itâs a large city! Okay, Iâll add a second vanishing point. But I have a quick question: for this drawing, for example, I would have liked the vanishing points to be further apart, but if thatâs the case, they would go off the edge of the paper. What can I do in these situations?
P.S. Iâm going to finish the drawing as best as I can and post it so I can get your feedback. Thank you so much again!
Well, itâs neat, itâs clear, itâs well-executed, well-composed, and well-structured.
If I had to nitpick, it would be about the background, which isnât as nicely done as the foreground. And also the mountain on the left, which completely encloses the fir tree. I think if the mountain came down and âcut offâ behind the fir tree, it would work better.
Otherwise, itâs really very beautiful, well done âïž
Si je devais pinailler, ce serait sur l'arriÚre plan qui est beaucoup moins joliment fait que le premier plan. Et aussi la montagne à gauche qui englobe totalement le sapin. Je pense que si la montagne descendait et "coupait" derriÚre le sapin, ça fonctionnerait mieux.
Hello Rakjah,
I tried to follow your advice; the mountains are more detailed, but Iâm having a lot of problems with the relief and the shadows.
Iâm also struggling with the proportions. đ
I donât think the difference is that significant; Iâve tested it on my end (without any references, so youâll need to check it against photos of mountains to verify ^^).
Basically, youâve made the shadows on your mountains too pronounced; theyâre too strong. When something is in the distance, thereâs an âatmospheric perspectiveâ that applies to it. This means that its colors will be tinted by the atmosphere (so more bluish) and they will lose contrast.
Therefore, the shadows on your mountain canât be as strong as the ones you have in the foreground.
And the second thing: the shadows on your mountains also need to respect the light source youâve chosen. Here, I think itâs in the upper right corner for the sun ^^
Donc les ombres sur ta montagne ne peuvent pas ĂȘtre aussi fortes que celles que tu as sur ton premier plan.
Et seconde chose : il faut que les ombres de tes montagnes respectent aussi la source de lumiĂšre que tu as choisie. Ici en haut Ă droite pour le soleil je pense ^^
Hello,
Here is my first illustration. Itâs the first time since childhood that Iâve drawn without using a reference.
There are some things I like and others I like less. I donât really like the lines on the plains (grass). I think the grayscale values of the cape donât work very well. Something is missing, but I canât figure out what it is right now. Iâm wondering if the clouds and smoke wouldnât look better with a darker outline. But Iâm afraid of ruining the illustration if I try:s
Otherwise, Iâm really happy with it!!!
First of all, the composition is great; youâve handled the shadows and lighting well, and itâs very clean and polished.
But, as you yourself noted, there are several small things that could be improved.
> The grass: it doesnât work because youâve made it too uniform. If itâs organic, avoid regularity. Create randomness. And the second rule: the further away something is, the less detail it should have.
> The character in the foreground: thereâs a visual conflict with his head. It almost touches the branch right next to it, which should be avoided. To fix this, Iâve reduced his size, but you could simply move the branch or the head so that they overlap or avoid each other completely.
> Also regarding the character, he clearly doesnât have the same light source as the rest of the image, which doesnât make sense, so Iâve corrected that.
> And concerning the folds, youâve created something with no tension lines. Donât hesitate to take a sheet at home and simulate the position heâs in to see the folds that are created.
> For the smoke, I would have made it lighter and added some values to give it some volume (see my quick correction attached).
But overall, itâs a very good piece of work, with good depth and it tells a story. Really great! đ
Honestly, itâs great. Thereâs a nice depth to the image, and the composition is clear, although I think itâs a shame that we feel âtrappedâ within the image (trees on the right and left, and the branches coming down from above and following the entire perimeter of the frame). I think you were trying to create a slightly unsettling atmosphere, and thatâs certainly what I feel when I look at your drawing. So, I suggest a small modification to the composition, especially in terms of the trees, to emphasize this aspect.
While Iâm at it, Iâd like to say that you can draw elements that are outside the frame (Iâm thinking of trees, specifically). Here, it feels like thereâs just a row of neatly aligned trees, as is sometimes the case on boulevards or avenues. However, the presence of the wolf, the falcon, and other elements leads me to believe that itâs actually more of a forest.
If itâs a forest, then there should be no symmetry, no geometry. It should be organic, and it should be random.
Hello Rakja,
Thank you for your advice and your appreciation. Yes, itâs true that I wanted to create something unsettling, but how do I do it? They arrive in a clearing, and the castle appears â whether itâs benevolent or not is up to them to decide. But if I were to create an entire forest, as I originally intended, I wouldnât have enough space to include it, so I would have had to make them walk through the forest, searching for their way. But itâs true that my trees are too neatly arranged, too uniform.
Have a good day, everyone.
Regina
In this case, weâre dealing with a pure composition issue. Once again, life is the best reference; donât hesitate to look for photos that match what you want to achieve; it might inspire you ;p
I didnât realize they were entering a clearing, but rather that they were leaving the forest (since there are no more trees behind the house).
So, something like this? I zoomed out and removed the branches that were closing off the sky above the house, so that it is less associated with something unsettling. And, of course, I added the trees behind the house and in the distance to show that they are arriving in a clearing ^^
Je n'avais pas du tout compris qu'ils entraient dans une clairiĂšre, mais plutĂŽt qu'ils sortaient de la forĂȘt (puisqu'il n'y a plus d'arbres derriĂšre la maison).
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Iâm going to start over (with a bit of color đ).
Happy holidays, and happy drawing to everyone!
Je vais recommencer (avec un peu de couleurđ
Bonnes fĂȘtes, bons dessins Ă toutes et tous
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Itâs really interesting to see how your work has evolved, and youâve created a boat! And a city!
Your illustration is really cool; youâve handled the perspective well. Itâs clear, and we have a nice setting around it, a holiday atmosphere. I really like how youâve treated the water, it works very well, and the boat looks great.
Honestly, itâs awesome!
The only thing that makes me wonder is the composition of your image. Your illustration looks very much like a postcard, with the setting and the sea as the main subject. Whereas in your earlier sketches, I had the impression that you wanted to draw attention to the boat. But I could be wrong. Did you want to create an illustration in the style of a postcard, or were you aiming for something different?
C'est hyper intéressant de voir ton cheminement et tu as fait un bateau ! Et une ville !
Ton illu est super cool, t'as bien géré la perspective, c'est clair, on a un joli décor autour, une ambiance de vacances, j'aime beaucoup le traitement de l'eau qui marche trÚs bien et le bateau est chouette.
Franchement c'est cool ^^
La seule chose qui me questionne c'est la compo de ton image. Ton illu fait trÚs carte postale, c'est le décor et la mer le sujet. Alors que sur tes pochades j'avais l'impression que tu voulais attirer l'attention sur le bateau. Mais je peux me tromper :) Est-ce que tu voulais une illustration type carte postale ou faire autre chose ?
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Good, Iâm glad you found it interesting. The postcard effect is more of a side effect.
I was in Brittany, so there was the sea, boats, a harbor, and a crĂȘperie⊠I sent a limited number of postcards (I actually sent twice as many), so the ones that accompany the drawing arenât the most relevant, because at one point I went âfishing.â
Regarding the perspective in retrospect, I think I misrepresented the chimneys (in my opinion, we shouldnât see them from above).
Bien, content que tu es trouvé cela cool. L'effet carte postale est plutÎt une conséquence.
J'Ă©tais parti Bretragne, donc mer, bateau, port, et crĂ©perie...j'ai envoyĂ© un nombre de pochades limitĂ© (j'ai fait le double) du coup celle qui accompagnent le dessin ne sont pas les plus pertinentes, car Ă un moment j'Ă©tais parti "pĂȘche".
Concernant la perspective à postériori j'ai trouvé mes cheminées mal représentées (pour moi, on ne devrait pas les voir de dessus)
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Here is my drawing! I didnât include the sketches in the previous lesson because I had a little trouble finding inspiration, so it took me a lot of attempts.
Here is my drawing, thank you in advance for your feedback :)
Voici mon dessin! Je n'ai pas mis les pochades dans le prĂ©cĂ©dent cours car j'ai eu un peu de mal Ă trouver lâinspiration, il m'a donc fallut de nombreux essais.
Voici donc mon dessin, merci d'avance pour votre retour :)
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12/01/2020
So, Iâm a bit torn because on the one hand, the composition is good, itâs clean, clear, and well-executed.
But on the other hand, thereâs a huge perspective problem. That said, it could be a stylistic choice; you see this kind of perspective on board game layouts, for example.
But I donât think that was the intended effect.
Iâve attached a correction to show you the core of the problem.
Overall, you have two different perspectives in your drawing. On one hand, your ground, the small river, the bridge, the streetlights, and the benches are on a plane that weâre looking down on.
On the other hand, we have the hotel, which weâre looking at head-on, with the horizon line in front of us.
Conclusion: itâs physically impossible.
So, Iâve made a correction to unify it by choosing one perspective or the other.
Alors je suis embĂȘtĂ© parce que d'un cĂŽtĂ© la compo est cool, c'est propre, clair et soignĂ©.
Et d'un autre cĂŽtĂ© il y a un Ă©norme problĂšme de perspective. Ceci dit ça peut ĂȘtre un parti pris, on voit ce genre de perspective sur des plateaux de jeux de sociĂ©tĂ© par exemple.
Mais je ne pense pas que c'était l'effet recherché.
Je t'ai joint une correction pour te montrer le fond du problĂšme.
Globalement tu as deux perspective différente dans ton dessin. D'un cÎté ton sol, la petite riviÚre, le pont, les lampadaires et les bancs sont sur un plan que l'on regarde d'en haut.
D'un autre cÎté on a l'hÎtel qu'on regarde frontalement, avec la ligne d'horizon en face de nous.
Bilan : c'est physiquement impossible.
Je t'ai donc fait une correction pour uniformiser en choisissant une perspective ou l'autre.
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It looks really good, and even with the color, the image is easy to read â itâs really cool (and +1 for the dragon ;p).
If I had to nitpick, I think the foreground is in a strange perspective, and the rocks look too soft (more like melted chocolate than sharp stones).
Otherwise, itâs really cool ^^.
Ăa rend super bien, mĂȘme Ă la couleur ton image se lit bien c'est vraiment chouette (et +1 pour le dragon ;p).
Si je devais pinailler, je trouve que le premier plan est dans une perspective bizarre et que les rochers on l'air tout mou (plus comme du chocolat fondu que comme des cailloux tranchants).
Autrement c'est vraiment chouette ^^
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Too bad I couldnât have replied sooner, I could have given you some feedback on the composition (the huge gap between the castle and the village, and the castle being cut off at the top).
To answer your question about the village, as you might guess, if you want to orient the houses differently from each other, youâll need to give them different vanishing points.
You still place them on the horizon line (that doesnât change), and you apply the new vanishing points you created to some of your houses.
By the way, the castle has a really cool style :D
Mince si j'avais pu répondre avant j'aurais pu te reprendre sur la compo (l'énorme vide entre le chùteau et le village et le chùteau coupé en haut).
Pour répondre à ta question concernant le village, comme tu t'en doutes, si tu veux orienter les maisons différemment les unes des autres, il va falloir qu'elles aient des points de fuite différents.
Tu les places toujours sur la ligne d'horizon (ça, ça ne change pas), et tu apliques les nouveaux points de fuite créés à certaines de tes maisons.
Le chùteau est super stylé soit dit en passant :D
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P.S. Iâm going to finish the drawing as best as I can and post it so I can get your feedback. Thank you so much again!
PS : Je vais finir le dessin du mieux que je peux et je le poste afin d'avoir ton avis merci beaucoup encore ^^"
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could you please give me your opinion on this first drawing?
Thank you đ
pouvez vous me donner votre avis sur ce premier dessin ?
merciđ
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Well, itâs neat, itâs clear, itâs well-executed, well-composed, and well-structured.
If I had to nitpick, it would be about the background, which isnât as nicely done as the foreground. And also the mountain on the left, which completely encloses the fir tree. I think if the mountain came down and âcut offâ behind the fir tree, it would work better.
Otherwise, itâs really very beautiful, well done âïž
Eh bien c'est propre, c'est clair, c'est bien exécuté, bien composé et bien construit.
Si je devais pinailler, ce serait sur l'arriÚre plan qui est beaucoup moins joliment fait que le premier plan. Et aussi la montagne à gauche qui englobe totalement le sapin. Je pense que si la montagne descendait et "coupait" derriÚre le sapin, ça fonctionnerait mieux.
Autrement c'est vraiment trĂšs joli, bravo âïž
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I tried to follow your advice; the mountains are more detailed, but Iâm having a lot of problems with the relief and the shadows.
Iâm also struggling with the proportions. đ
j'ai essayé de suivre ton conseil ,les montagnes sont plus travaillées mais j'ai beaucoup de problÚmes avec les reliefs et les ombres.
j'ai Ă©galement du mal avec les proportions.đ
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01/03/2020
I donât think the difference is that significant; Iâve tested it on my end (without any references, so youâll need to check it against photos of mountains to verify ^^).
Basically, youâve made the shadows on your mountains too pronounced; theyâre too strong. When something is in the distance, thereâs an âatmospheric perspectiveâ that applies to it. This means that its colors will be tinted by the atmosphere (so more bluish) and they will lose contrast.
Therefore, the shadows on your mountain canât be as strong as the ones you have in the foreground.
And the second thing: the shadows on your mountains also need to respect the light source youâve chosen. Here, I think itâs in the upper right corner for the sun ^^
Ca se joue à pas grand-chose je pense, j'ai testé de mon cÎté (sans référence, il faudra vérifier avec des photos de montagnes pour vérifier ^^).
En gros, tu as trop marquĂ© les ombres sur ta montagnes, c'est trop prĂ©sent. Quand quelque chose est situĂ© dans le lointain, on a une "perspective atmosphĂ©rique" qui s'applique dessus. Ca signifie que ses couleurs vont ĂȘtre teintĂ©es par l'atmosphĂšre (donc + bleutĂ©es) et elles vont perdre en contraste.
Donc les ombres sur ta montagne ne peuvent pas ĂȘtre aussi fortes que celles que tu as sur ton premier plan.
Et seconde chose : il faut que les ombres de tes montagnes respectent aussi la source de lumiĂšre que tu as choisie. Ici en haut Ă droite pour le soleil je pense ^^
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Here is my first illustration. Itâs the first time since childhood that Iâve drawn without using a reference.
There are some things I like and others I like less. I donât really like the lines on the plains (grass). I think the grayscale values of the cape donât work very well. Something is missing, but I canât figure out what it is right now. Iâm wondering if the clouds and smoke wouldnât look better with a darker outline. But Iâm afraid of ruining the illustration if I try:s
Otherwise, Iâm really happy with it!!!
VoilĂ ma premiĂšre illustration. C'est la premiĂšre fois deluis l'enfance que je dessine sans modĂšle.
Il y a des choses qui me plaisent et d'autres moins. Les traits sur les plaines (herbes) me plaisent pas trop. Les valeurs de gris de la cape fonctionnent mal je trouve. Il manque quelque chose mais je ne trouve pas quoi pour le moment. Je me drmande si les nuages et la fumée ne seraient pas mieux avec un contour plus foncé. Mais je peur de ruiner l'illustration en essayant :s
Sinon je suis vraiment contente !!!
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23/02/2020
First of all, the composition is great; youâve handled the shadows and lighting well, and itâs very clean and polished.
But, as you yourself noted, there are several small things that could be improved.
> The grass: it doesnât work because youâve made it too uniform. If itâs organic, avoid regularity. Create randomness. And the second rule: the further away something is, the less detail it should have.
> The character in the foreground: thereâs a visual conflict with his head. It almost touches the branch right next to it, which should be avoided. To fix this, Iâve reduced his size, but you could simply move the branch or the head so that they overlap or avoid each other completely.
> Also regarding the character, he clearly doesnât have the same light source as the rest of the image, which doesnât make sense, so Iâve corrected that.
> And concerning the folds, youâve created something with no tension lines. Donât hesitate to take a sheet at home and simulate the position heâs in to see the folds that are created.
> For the smoke, I would have made it lighter and added some values to give it some volume (see my quick correction attached).
But overall, itâs a very good piece of work, with good depth and it tells a story. Really great! đ
PremiÚrement, la compo est cool, tu as bien géré les ombres et lumiÚres et c'est trÚs propre et soigné.
Mais comme tu l'as toi-mĂȘme notĂ©, il y a pleins de petites choses Ă amĂ©liorer.
> l'herbe : ça ne fonctionne pas parce que tu as fait quelque chose d'hyper régulier. Si c'est organique, on évite la régularité. On crée de l'aléatoire. Et deuxiÚme rÚgle : plus c'est loin, moins c'est détaillé.
> le personnage au premier plan : il y a un noeud graphique avec sa tĂȘte. Elle touche presque pile la branche juste Ă cĂŽtĂ© >> Ă Ă©viter absolument. Pour palier à ça je l'ai rĂ©duit, mais tu pourrais simplement dĂ©caler la branche ou la tĂȘte pour qu'elles se chevauchent ou s'Ă©vitent franchement.
> Toujours sur le perso, il n'a visiblement pas la mĂȘme source de lumiĂšre que le reste de ton image >> pas logique, du coup j'ai corrigĂ© ça
> Et concernant les plis, tu as fait quelque chose qui n'a aucne ligne de tension. N'hésite pas à prendre un drap chez toi et à simuler la position qu'il a pour voir les plis qui se créent ^^
> Pour la fumée, je l'aurais fait plus claire et avec quelques valeurs dedans pour lui donner un peu de volume (cf ma correction rapide ci-jointe ^^)
Mais c'est un trĂšs bon travail en tout, avec une bonne profondeur d'image, ça raconte une histoire en plus. Vraiment trĂšs chouette đ
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11/03/2020
Here is my drawing, inspired by Grégoire and the forest tutorial. Of course, there are many imperfections and errors, such as the proportions and the folds in the cape, and many others. I've done several drawings, including one of the sea.
Have a good day, everyone.
Best regards,
RĂ©gina
voilĂ j'envoie mon mon dessin, inspirĂ© par grĂ©goire ainsi que le tuto de la forĂȘt, evidemment beaucoup d'imperfection d'erreurs les proporpotions les plis sur la cape et bien
d'autres, j'en fait plusieurs(dessins) la mer par exemple.
bonne journée a vous tous
salutations
régina
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Honestly, itâs great. Thereâs a nice depth to the image, and the composition is clear, although I think itâs a shame that we feel âtrappedâ within the image (trees on the right and left, and the branches coming down from above and following the entire perimeter of the frame). I think you were trying to create a slightly unsettling atmosphere, and thatâs certainly what I feel when I look at your drawing. So, I suggest a small modification to the composition, especially in terms of the trees, to emphasize this aspect.
While Iâm at it, Iâd like to say that you can draw elements that are outside the frame (Iâm thinking of trees, specifically). Here, it feels like thereâs just a row of neatly aligned trees, as is sometimes the case on boulevards or avenues. However, the presence of the wolf, the falcon, and other elements leads me to believe that itâs actually more of a forest.
If itâs a forest, then there should be no symmetry, no geometry. It should be organic, and it should be random.
Franchement c'est cool. Y a une belle profondeur dans l'image, la compo est claire, bien que je trouve dommage qu'on soit "enfermé" dans l'image (arbres à droite et à gauche et les branches qui reviennent au-dessus et suivent bien tout le tour du format). Je pense que tu cherchais à faire une ambiance un peu angoissante, c'est ce que je ressens en tout cas devant ton dessin. Du coup je te propose une petite modification de compo, en particulier au niveau des arbres, pour accentuer cet aspect-là .
J'en profite pour dire que tu peux dessiner des Ă©lĂ©ments hors champs (je pense Ă des arbres justement). Ici, on a l'impression qu'il y a juste une rangĂ©e d'arbres bien alignĂ©s comme c'est parfois le cas sur des boulevards ou des avenues. Alors que la prĂ©sence du loup, du faucon et d'autres Ă©lĂ©ments m'amĂšnent Ă penser qu'il s'agit en fait plutĂŽt d'une forĂȘt.
Si c'est une forĂȘt >> pas de symĂ©trie, pas de gĂ©omĂ©trie, on est sur de l'organique, ça doit ĂȘtre alĂ©atoire.
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17/03/2020
Thank you for your advice and your appreciation. Yes, itâs true that I wanted to create something unsettling, but how do I do it? They arrive in a clearing, and the castle appears â whether itâs benevolent or not is up to them to decide. But if I were to create an entire forest, as I originally intended, I wouldnât have enough space to include it, so I would have had to make them walk through the forest, searching for their way. But itâs true that my trees are too neatly arranged, too uniform.
Have a good day, everyone.
Regina
merci pour tes conselils et ton apprĂ©ciation , alors c'est vrai je voulais faire quelque chose d'angoissant mais comment faire parce qu'ils arrivent dans un clairiĂšre et le chĂąteau leur apparĂąit bienveillant ou pas a chacun de choisir, mais si je faisais une forĂȘt complĂšte qui Ă©tait mon idĂ©e de dĂ©part je n'avais plus de place pour le caser alors j'aurai dĂ» les faire marcher dans la forĂȘt cherchant leur chemin. mais c'est vrai que mes arbres sont trop bien rangĂ©s trop en pers.
bonne journée a vous tous
régina
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22/03/2020
In this case, weâre dealing with a pure composition issue. Once again, life is the best reference; donât hesitate to look for photos that match what you want to achieve; it might inspire you ;p
I didnât realize they were entering a clearing, but rather that they were leaving the forest (since there are no more trees behind the house).
So, something like this? I zoomed out and removed the branches that were closing off the sky above the house, so that it is less associated with something unsettling. And, of course, I added the trees behind the house and in the distance to show that they are arriving in a clearing ^^
Dans ce cas, on est sur un pur problÚme de composition. Encore une fois, les référence c'est la vie, n'hésite pas à chercher des photos qui peuvent correspondre à ce que tu voudrais faire, ça peut t'inspirer ;p
Je n'avais pas du tout compris qu'ils entraient dans une clairiĂšre, mais plutĂŽt qu'ils sortaient de la forĂȘt (puisqu'il n'y a plus d'arbres derriĂšre la maison).
Du coup quelque chose de ce genre ? J'ai dézoomé et retiré les branches qui refermaient le ciel au-dessus de la maison, pour qu'elle soit moins associé à quelque chose d'angoissant. Et bien sûr, j'ai rajouté les arbres derriÚre la maison et dans le lointain pour faire comprendre qu'ils arrivent dans une clairiÚre ^^